Personal Statement Review

Hi, I would like you to proofread my personal statement of interest and background.

It shouldn't take much time as it is ONE page only. You should check the following:
- Typos, spelling or grammatical errors
- Make sure that it has strong, clear, and concise writing
- Cliches and repetitive language
- Formal language (i.e., academic writing)
- Positive and confident tone
- Plagiarism

Your feedback is also needed for this statement Thank you