Personal Statement

A personal statement for a masters program for biomedical sciences, they're seeking students who are trying to do pre-med after who are low-income, have a history of science courses and experience with shadowing/research. This is my third draft, every time my counselor says I need to provide the values I bring for this masters program, tying how I my experience with my academics, shadowing and research will make me stand out. The prompt is 1) how your background has prepared you for the CUSM MBS program and 2) how the CUSM MBS program fits with your personal goals. Word limit = 250 words. In red I added what my counselor was asking to provide. Need it by this week or next week maximum please.