Need help with editing -- 2

I am an author in Nashville Tn. I have written many novels but have the darndest time proofreading lol! I have combed over my latest book and am almost finished. I would like someone to proofread my novel and give an HONEST opinion. I can not afford much as I am on a fixed income. Mostly, I am hoping to gain a little extra income from my work and have a few books to give to my friends/family. I can only do a payment plan. This is what I have so far...remember, I am going over the novel and rewriting it. So -- it is not complete. Tell me what you think? Please, do not steal my material...I am not certain if this site is that safe.