Memo Revision for Employee Communication

I'm looking for someone to help revise a memo for my job. The primary purpose of this memo is to inform our employees about important updates. The tone of the memo needs to be friendly, making it accessible and pleasant for all staff members to read.

Ideal skills and experience include:
- Strong English language proficiency
- Prior experience in corporate communication
- Ability to write in a formal and professional tone
- Excellent editing and proofreading skills

Revise the subject line, organization and format to improve the memo. You do not have to do a major revision of sentences--just improve the format and the organization to highlight the important information.
At the bottom of the revised memo, write a paragraph justifying your revisions. In your paragraph, be sure to reference the text, the communication triangle, Aristotle's modes of persuasion, and/or memo conventions.