Graphic Design Essay Revision

Review Essay I wrote and revise/ fix it to meet all requirements I gave you in revision guidelines. Annotated bibligraphy especially needs adjusted because I did not follow instructions. I struggled with the length of my essay. Some paragraphs became overly long and went too deeply into certain points, which may have made the writing less concise and straightforward than it could be. I also think I need smoother transitions between ideas, because at times I’m not sure if I moved from one point to another too quickly. Some ideas may have been repeated or extended more than necessary. It is hard for me to judge and navigate that aspect. Thats why I need your help! May add in or change information as needed.