Editing and proofreading

Your paper reflects the unique perspective that Burlington Coats has on pleasing customers, and maintaining customer loyalty. You make a good argument for why Burlington really needs to maximize the potential that on-line sales could provide. What would help is if the outline and development of your claims were more concise and organized. Could you give a look at the Final Paper form now on ELMs, and see if you might adapt this current draft to a structure which would better guide the reader , in order to follow your points?" and I have attached how the format should look like