Free-Verse Love Poem Refinement

I have three raw, free-verse movements that explore the hush of unspoken affection and the quiet ache of distance. The images are already on the page—candlelit words, retreating waves, eyes as oceans—but the phrasing still feels tentative. I want each line to breathe with intimacy while remaining unmistakably mine, because this piece is meant only for personal expression, not publication.

You’ll come in as a poet, not an editor marking up grammar alone. I need your ear for pacing, your instinct for line breaks, and your knack for sharpening metaphors without losing their softness. Feel free to suggest subtle rearrangements, tighten repetition, and enrich sensory detail so the three sections either stand strong as a suite or flow seamlessly into one continuous poem. What matters most is that the vulnerability stays intact.

Deliverables
• A polished free-verse poem (final text in Word or Google Doc)
• A tracked-changes or side-by-side draft showing what you altered
• Optional short note on your creative decisions so I understand your thought process

I’m ready to start as soon as you are and will provide quick feedback on each pass until it feels right.