Pitch Video for a non profit

Im looking to get a pitch video improved from the one I did myself. Its a simple video that helps to show the many working parts of our nonprofit. I need to highlight that we are aiming to build a profitable nonprofit, using the revenue from the Music Store, a Coffee Shop during the day, a Mocktail Bar at night, with the income generated from the membership program, we intended to become a sustainable non profit. The Non Profit is a studio where teachers can teach students and we offer probono lessons across all mediums, from piano, guitar, vocal, drum lessons, etc. to photo editing, writing, recording, and painting. At the Creative Lab, we believe in the power of community and the importance of shared experiences, we need this video to communicate our goal to foster a healthy, vibrant, and inclusive community where creativity thrives. By hosting workshops, and supporting arts—from writing and painting to music and sculpting—we provide our community with opportunities to learn, grow, and connect. The video I created was to simply to share the vision and help attract sponsorship, I would like this video to be a little more polished to show the general public what we are trying to do.